Abandon (snowflake tetractys)

 

shy

eager

artist lips

unbridle mine

resplendent kiss of sun-ripened berries

our sanity abandoned for passion

blurry rapture

as reason’s

 simply

lost

 

 

~ Tetractys should express a complete thought, profound or comic, witty or wise using 20 syllables. They can be written with more than one verse but each subsequent verse must invert the syllable count. There is no limit to the number of verses. The structure is:

line 1 – 1 syllable

line 2 – 2 syllables

line 3 – 3 syllables

line 4 – 4 syllables

line 5 – 10 syllables

 

Two verses is a Snowflake Tetractys.

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8 Responses to Abandon (snowflake tetractys)

  1. Very sensual, and effective write!

  2. brian says:

    nice…i like a little adandonment of sanity….esp when it comes to passion…smiles…very nice and sensual…

  3. A perfect kiss of a poem, I especially liked ‘blurry rapture’.

  4. hmmm….beautiful and highly seductive…the berries…sanity abandoned for passion…yes..i like

  5. Ayala says:

    Sanity abandoned for passion- love it!

  6. Becky Kilsby says:

    You really seem to have squeezed every ounce out of every word… beautiful, Christi. I like this form!

    ‘unbridled’ is gorgeous….

  7. Aida says:

    Oh, that’s such sweet loss of reason!

  8. John Richter says:

    I really like the form and what you did with it……. it has a natrually beautiful shape too…… It’s so hard sometimes to squeeze a sentient thought into a form like that, but you did it as though effortlessly…….. nice poem! But I’m always a sucker for a kiss, and yes, everything but passion goes right out the window!

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