Butterfield

 

Butterfield 
 
every day
 
at least one
bomb
     stops
 
      t.i.c.k.i.n.g.
 
nightly anchors
airbrush
insidious
hush-hush
steady ruination
and rushing
of a self-predicted
epidemic
inflicting statistics
on a homeland
battlefield
our truth yields
    
    to its own hand
 
heavy medaled
magazines
empty missions
shouldered-shifting
post-to-post
traumatic token
soldiers hoisted
roped
and broken  
their folded hope
is hanging high
 
        now commanding
 
the white-gloved Tapping  
of a Butterfield lullaby
 
 

footnote—

Every day, one US soldier commits suicide. More U.S. soldiers have killed themselves than have died in the Afghan War.  47% are under 25.

 

 

© image and words christi moon 2012

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25 Responses to Butterfield

  1. Tino says:

    That is a staggering statistic, really rammed home by such chilling words that are still sinking in.

  2. brian miller says:

    ugh hard hitting…just watched Taking Chance today..on carrying home a soldier that has died…to think of what war has done to these men should give us pause…should….stirring…

  3. this is so heartbreaking… your poem and the statistics below…. all so wrong.

    • Christi Moon says:

      yes Laura…it’s really insult to injury. horrific situation from any angle. thank you for taking the time to read and comment ~ C.

  4. Manicddaily says:

    Oh, so terribly sad. Very well put together; the tapping especially at the end. I wonder whether you might not consider making the post-script and inscription at the start – It works perfectly well as it it, and especially in the blogging context, but if you wanted to publish, you could almost have some statistic like that at the front. Powerful poem. k.

    • Christi Moon says:

      thank you manicdaily appreciate your thoughtful commentary. I am glad the ending was effective. I didn’t want to give to much away with putting those stats at the beginning of the piece.

  5. I was not aware of that, how incredibly sad. In saying that, your poem is awesome. Your line work; short phrases of quick breaths, was beautifully written, but oh so sad. My fav so far.

  6. hey christi
    although you wouldnt know it (unless you were an enigma codebreaking machine:)
    we both wrote about the same subject;
    you do it justice in a way i could not, by going direct and
    with craft and skill you point a subtle but deep enough touch
    at a sore point
    which is kept
    under the radar
    but as more of these guys suffer
    in waves and multiples its going to get harder to surpress:

    the stats from Vietnam are beyond understanding –
    and nothing was learnt . . .

    sad lines but it is always good to read your work:
    i hope you are all
    well and good 🙂

  7. Rending, your lines create an atmosphere of precarious balance and foreboding. t.i.c.k.i.n.g. sets the tone for the horror to come, one removed in space but not time as PTSD takes its toll. Yours is poetry that makes a difference with its artistry and message.

  8. claudia says:

    it must be so difficult to live with the memories of fighting in a war…sensitively penned christi… and what a heart-wrenching statistics

  9. C Rose says:

    you bring great truth to the affect of war on those that experience it as the soldier, in that you honor them. Working with those enduring the trauma of this act is what I hope to be a main purpose in my work as a new healer. Powerful write and truth ~ send love and peace ~ Rose

  10. Becky Kilsby says:

    Formatting defitinetly amplifies the message and the aural connections suggest real shiftiness… all works well on this sombre topic

  11. Victoria says:

    Such a strong, painful expression of a tragic reality. They bear these inner wounds throughout their lives.

  12. Luke Prater says:

    Very powerful piece Christi. dropping words, like the ticking, each one meaningful, potent, and the sum of which create the bomb-drop reality that you note below the piece. The minimalist style suits the theme perfectly. I wouldn’t strip anything more, or add anything either. I do feel that drop of sickness in the gut though. Ugh. Thank you for writing on this. Shame on teh Pentagon for not regularly announcing this fact and including these deaths as War fatalities.

  13. Luke Prater says:

    ps. You might want to amend your commenting system (under ‘discussion’ in the settings menu in admin dashboard), as there is no option for easy commenting even if you’re signed in as a WordPress blogger. You might like to offer Twitter/Facebook/Google login comments also, and direct access to OpenID you need to get the OpenID Plugin for that.. but it means you can use your own URL as OpenID for instance on Blogspot blogs where they don’t allow name/URL comment logins).

  14. Sanjoy Saksena says:

    You have proved through this poem that minimum words do make the
    maximum impact on us sometimes.

  15. Christi Moon says:

    thank you Sanjoy…much appreciate the comment ~ C.

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